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My manga "Undone", written and drawn by me, edited by David Lee
You can turn the pages on the top or bottom right hand corner.
Thank you very much to =eindraa and ^rydi1689 for making this a DD <3

FOR THOSE WHO CAN'T SEE THE WRITING - I've written the words for each page, hopefully this makes it easier to understand I'm so sorry it's too small to read... (I'll try to upload a bigger version when I get the proper programs)
Undone
Page 1
I am high up on a hill, where orange and yellow flowers glisten
I am under a shadow of a tree, and here it carries the dark of me.

Beyond the dull edge a sea of city is seen.
It is all trash, cement, and anything unclean.

To others my presence is unknown.
Here in this dark, I have always been alone
There is so much silence, so much emptiness,
I've got nothing to gain, hope for, or atone.
Page 2
I've realized this darkness will not fade or fray,
Whether the sun goes here or there, this is where the dark will stay.
Page 3
Then... a girl came by
her hair was as bright as the buttercups of spring
Page 4
"What's wrong? Why are you here under dark and cold?
Your colours have nulled and your face is gloom...
On days like these, we should be flying and buzzing like bees"
Page 5
"I'm not a bee and I will not buzz,
my world is here under the shadows, and here I will stay"
She looked at me sadly, the shine in her eyes became thin
Page 6
She handed me a flower, a rose without its thorns
"Take this, it is a part of me. I will come back and take you out of the shadows,
and bring the happiness that you need"
Page 7
"I promise you"
Page 8
She left me with the rose, its cherry red petals were soft to my fingers - it made me happy...
I stood out to the light, the coldness of bark on my back dwindled.
Her promise engraved me.
Page 9
She came everyday, she held me out to the sun
We always talked, laughed, danced and always had fun.
But I didn't notice...
Page 10
The rose petals were rotting...
along with her presence, she didn't come day by day anymore, she came less and less...
Page 11
I told her the rose was rotting, but she said
"It will never die, I will still come here to be with you,
what I felt for you then, I still feel now,
the rose is still here, even if its petals are coming undone"
This I tried to believe... but the petals kept on falling...
Page 12
I threw the petal-less rose over the edge into the pit of rust and trash.
One more, she came by
Page 13
Her hair still as bright as the buttercups of spring
"What's wrong? Why are you under the tree again? I came to take you out of the shadow...
what have I done that made you remain in pain?"

"The rose is dead, like your presence to me.
you said it'll never die and that is what I tried to believe".
Page 14
"Your smile in my days became less,
the shadow of the tree became more stretched.
The remains of the rose is over the edge,
now leave me here where I am meant to be"
Page 15
"I found another rose but you only saw that one die,
out in the city is rust and cement, this hill has no roses and my promise had to be kept.
It took me days around this place to find...
But you never believed me, you never tried."
Page 16
(pretty sure that's readable :L...)





Done on PS and a variety of traditional media.

If you want to see this and weekly updates of my work [link]

Hope you like it ^^
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-03-09
"Her rose will die if doubt is not slept, but it will not die if faith was kept"
Undone Manga by *NA0H tells a heartbreaking story of vanishing trust and shattering bonds... ( Suggested by iingo and Featured by rydi1689 )
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thecreepyoneofmany Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
;_; i cried...
IS SO SAD!... But I still loves it >:-D
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TROgirl Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
so cool! How did you make it flip the pages? o3o
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NicksFluffyShit Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Or you drag them with mouse from the bottom right or left corner!! :3
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TROgirl Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:meow:
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NicksFluffyShit Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:icontrogirl: You icon is SOOOOO CUTE!!!! 
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TROgirl Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconblushplz: awww thank you :iconaawwplz:
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NicksFluffyShit Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconyuiglompplz:nyaaa~
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ArtLover2293 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Student Writer
Arrow Keys.
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TROgirl Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thx...
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Indigo-Serenade Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This was a very emotional story... bravo!
Grats on the DD; it's completely well-deserved! :squee: :heart:
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rose-star Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
This was really great! I really enjoyed it :heart:

My only complaint is that it is too small! The text was REALLY hard to read. ;~;
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Rewwrz Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
;-; :iconcryforeverplz:
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Na0h Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
I'M SORRY FOR MAKING EVERYONE CRY AH ;3;... thank you for all the sweet comments <3<3
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KittyClaw12 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
awww

i loved this comic the end kinda made me wanna cry, but it was goodgreat job
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ODDxFOX Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i have to admit, this is one of the most beautiful storys iv read on DA yet! that art was great and the story made me think a lot about the meaning of the story. it really is wonderful and fully deserves the DD. congraz and great job ^^
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cube4x4 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
It comes to remind me that there are sometimes no happy endings, but a lesson can be learned from the tragedies of fictional characters. But the fictional characters are reflected from that of real life.
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Get-fancy Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
I can barely read it? D:
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tylerpuff Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful
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BlueNekox3 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing :happycry:
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WhatIfSomeday Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
*Bursts into tears*
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IceDragon19 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Just fantastic and amazing. A story line that truly touches the heart. The style was breathtaking, I especially liked how at the beginning you used bright, vibrant colors, but at the end it was black in white. Just overall perfect. The effect that made it seem as if you were actually flipping the pages added to the experience too.
~icedragon
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skullduggery-jo Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
Wow! i love it <3 the arrangements on the page are so perfect.
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Thesawyer Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
GOT IT!..... now let me cry.....
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
This is amazing.
The plot is just fantastic and interesting.
The dialogue is well written.
Then the drawings, I am in love with your style.
I love the way you line, color and everything.
The symbolism in this is amazing, and the overall story is just breath taking.
I really love the last quote "her rose will die if doubt is not slept, but it will not die if faith was kept"
This is just a breathtaking story.
This really deserved a DD, congratulations a million times!
:huggle:
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Fehnwrites Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
looks amazing but I can't read it no matter how I strain my eyes =[
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Dreamer113 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing work! Beautifully Sad yet Wonderfully Happy. Keep up the Breath-taking work~
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random-drawer-person Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So pretty. I love it. It was quite difficult to read though as the text was quite small but it was worth the trouble. ^^
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cliselle Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is amazing!
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SqueakyToybox Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is lovely :heart:
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Day-night-sleeper Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful....simply marvelous....
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blanket86 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
This is so amazing! Very interesting composition! Congratulations!
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tulf42 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Story of the Week! I love this Idea of Faith and Hope being like a rose.
I almost cried at the end of reading this. I'm guessing there was meant to be poetry. Your art style is good too. Congrats!
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Katy133 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Filmographer
Beautiful work. I like the watercolour painted style. And I like the poetic story as well.

I was wondering, how did you make the "page-turning" effect? Did you use a tutorial that you could possibly direct me to?
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eppoif1 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
At times the text is hard to read because of how small it is.
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Audball08 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Interface Designer
The bitter ending provides a huge relation to life. I can project in many ways to other people because everybody has given up on something. It also give a bit of awakening and enlightenment as to how things work in the world. You two did a great job on this manga.

The art is a wonderful mixed style and that's what caught my attention.
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KyteLeonhart Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
This is beautiful! It pulled at my heart-strings and put my face to the screen! Like the guy before me, I had to zoom in a lot, especially since my vision is not that great. Just a tip, bigger please!
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kori-hibana Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
it was wonderfully written and drawn--I just wish that it was bigger though. Even with 20/20 vision and craning my neck I had to zoom in on my computer screen O3O
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horseygurl258 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Photographer
Beautiful concept. In some ways it reminded me of Beauty and the Beast. This would make a really cool beginning for it.
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Kiara-Vestigium Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I like it. but it was hard to read since the letters were so small. even with my glasses on and making it bigger on the screen.
I love the last page though. the poem is really nice and sums the story up so well.
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Lunalaef Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Un trabajo bellisimo
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AstraNocturna Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
How did you do this. I'd love to try and make something like this, but I only have PSE. You do a wonderful job. I absolutely love your style!
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swagology Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
o.o i love this
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Beautiful - love the colors and the meaning!
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lotusyui Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Digital Artist
...:iconcryingplz: That's so sad! The artwork's really good. It's like a poem with pictures. Good job and congrats on the daily deviation!
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hiro94michan Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student General Artist
Th-that was so sad! TT^TT I hope you would make another one! Something that can lighten his world or something! But the artwork was beautiful and the story was relatable somehow, I love it!
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ShadowIsStillAlive Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It hurt to read. It's better if you listen to Arise by Flyleaf while reading...

I feel like a spammer right now. Sorry!
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KindOfPoisonous Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013
the artwork is so beautiful, so is the story :)
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yooci Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
What a sad story! Well, congrats on the DD. You deserve it!
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Bien16 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful story! the last four lines were so sweet :heart:
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Sevslover6195 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful and worthy of the DD well done!
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